Monday, February 8, 2010

Voices in my head

The other day I come across a blog on line about gene doping and how it will replace steroids in the athletic world. As I was reading that post I felt like the person was able to articulate his voice in his post much better than I ever will. I started to think that I will have to look up some other posts of his so I can see  how he creates his voice. I feel like I don't have specific voice in my posts so I want to learn from others. So... Well I was reading this post: Will Genetic Juicing Replace Steroids? and I started top think Maaan... This guy is smart! He had so many legible example his post. For example he knows that what is the current status on the gene therapy in the medical world.
Currently, it is only legally used for medical reasons to make patients live longer. However, gene therapy is currently risky for several reasons: firstly, the gene may be rejected by patient.
 He seems really educated in the this topic. He uses a very professional voice that I will newer in my posts. He definitely knows what he is talking about so I looked up his profile. Of course he is smart! Of course he is educated in this field because he must be a biology teacher. I did not find out too much about him but I could figure it out. All of his other posts he does the same thing. I feel like he is educating the people about all the dietary and medical stuff they supposed to know but obviously people don't know. I think he is doing a good job explaining- in his doping post - the effects of the gene doping. He uses a radical voice and cuts straight to the point that if someone do use this method of doping can seriously be hurt or even killed. I feel like he is educating and he is doing a good job with the choice of words he using to make the reader think twice before he or she does something like this in order to improve performance.
If the operation is done poorly enough, the immune system's response may be severe enough to kill the patient (i.e., shutting down organs, including the brain). Also, gene therapy does not last for a long period of time, so multiple operations are required until the therapy actually works and cures the patient.
He has a source on his blog where hi is getting all his ideas and inspirations to write this post which I think is clever way to see where did you start your thinking and how did you developed the topic.  I feel like I should analyze his source because the post is clever a scientific and I can get to know a lot of very important information about gene doping.
But back to the post that I choose!
He gives an example of a German coach who would have been willing to give these stuff to his athletes in order to improve their performance but thankfully he got caught before he could do so. I think it was a clever idea a to give  a negative example that what could happen if you do it so.
In 2006, a German track and field coach tried to allow genetic juicing to his athletes for the 2008 Olympics in China, but was caught before anyone could be treated. 
I think that i important to give examples so the audience can imagine the consequences of this things. It makes the reader feel that he really knows what he is talking about.
This is the kind of writing I would like to present to you but I would like to put some personal experience from my sport you you can have little sense how is like to be in a grinder of the doping world.

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